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Some people think certain old buildings are worth preserving more than the other ones.Which types of old buildings should be preserved？Do you think the advantages of preserving old buildings outweigh the disadvantages？

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The chart displays the
number
 of visitors utilizing three main airports in New York City from 1995 to 2000. The total of passengers is measured in
million
.
Overall
, it can be seen that both Laguardia and Newark experienced increasing trends
while
 John F. Kennedy faced slight fluctuation. At the
begining
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beginning
 of 1995, Laguardia had above 30
million
 visitors and took a lead until the end of the period. Around 25
million
 people decided to visit John F.
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Kennedy
at
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 1995 and the airport’s visitor
had
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reached a peak which was nearly 50
million
at
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 1997, completely defeating the others.
While
 Newark encountered the lowest
number
 of visitors about 15
million
 and rose continuously until 1998 with over 40
million
. After that, it faced
slight
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 decrease through the end of
period
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. In conclusion, the
number
 of travellers
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 Laguardia
at
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 2000 exceeded the others significantly, In fact, the difference
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number
 was almost 30
million
 compared to others.
This
 shows a strong utilization of each airport.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • architectural heritage
  • cultural identity
  • aesthetic value
  • historical preservation
  • cultural significance
  • urban landscape
  • tourist attractions
  • sustainability
  • adaptive reuse
  • environmental impact
  • demolition
  • economic benefits
  • heritage buildings
  • conservation efforts
  • historical landmarks
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