A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amounth of money, either to sponsor a local children's sport team for two years, or to pay for open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts say how you think the company should spend the money Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a citizen of Biga, which is

also

close to your company. I am writing

this

letter to help your decision about the fund you want to spend. Sponsoring the Youngest Footballers, which is our children's football team, can be beneficial for us. Because players are successful in their jobs and trying to challenge other global teams. We need to have some financial support for it.

For example

, they can not have opportunities to go to other cities for the competitions so it can help to arrange transport facilities. The people who live in Biga

also

need some social activities

such

as concerts. There have not been any festivals for 10 years.

This

year, one of them is considering but because of the limited budget, it may be delayed.

Therefore

, if you decide to pay for the concerts, your company may have a good impact on all people. I believe that you prefer to be the sponsor of children's sports teams because it brings long-term benefits. With the help of

this

, you can make advertisements for your company for two years. I hope that my ideas can help you to make better decisions. Faithfully. Irem Saribas

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

201 words

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