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Some people think that qualities a person needs to become a successful in today's world cannot be learned at university To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent days, many business owners think academic qualification is more important to hire
employees
 rather than life
experience
 or personal qualities.
While
this
 has several benefits, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with, employers believe
people
 who do their academics are more intelligent
as well as
 quick learners than experienced
people
. individuals who
done
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 their college degrees are up to date about technology and current market affairs these skills may provide new ideas to employers which
lead
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leads
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 to expanding their businesses.
For example
,
one
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in one
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 of the tech giants in Tamilnadu Infosys management our 80% of
employees
 are passing out students in "Anna
university
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University
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" because they have a
lot
 of skills and
also
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are also
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upto
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up to
 date.
Likewise
,
managements
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management
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 strongly believe, a student spends a
lot
 of time and effort in order to get a university degree which shows the person had
lot
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a lot
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 of hard work and discipline. In my opinion,
this
 is a negative development.
while
, academic qualifications are one of the ways to filter skilled labours, which is not the only way.
People
 who had a
lot
 of
experience
 in their fields
are easily handled
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 the problem when it's come.many
employees
 who had various degrees still face difficulties to handle their clients because of a lack of
experience
 and skills.
For instance
, "the Hindu" newspaper published most of the engineering students in India are unskilled that's one of the primary reasons why they lose their jobs.
Moreover
,personal qualities are an essential factor that needs to be taken into the account. workers' loyalty play the important role in business growth. trustworthy
employees
 are as as important qualified workers. In conclusion,
although
, employers hiring the
academic
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academically
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 qualified
people
 might have some benefits, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement. Good
experience
 and personal qualities are much more important than
the
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university qualification.
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