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nowadays ,people in most countries decide to have children later in life. why do the do so? do the advantages of this trend outweight the disadvantages?

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Having
children
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 is a huge commitment, yet many
peope
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people
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, nowadays there is an increasing trend among adults in many countries to avoid having offspring until later in life. In
may
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my
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 opinion the benefits of
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 trend outweigh the drawbacks.
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 with, in countries like Indonesia, young couples are expected to have
children
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 soon after they married. Some people argue that
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 having
children
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 when we are still young could be a huge benefit.
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, when
children
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 grew up we may have more time to spend together as a family.
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, newly married couples are still finding their way to adapt to a new chapter of their
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. There are many things that should be arranged between the two married persons,
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 as where to live.
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, in
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 stage, the presence of a child may add pressure on them.
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, I think it is beneficial to avoid having
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 until everything has been sorted out.
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, as a
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 we have to prepare a steady financial source as
children
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 will need to have
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 education and health care insurance.
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, some people including me, strongly believe that it may be the best decision to have a child later in life when we are financially stable and mentally prepared. In conclusion,
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 some people may think that it is a waste of time, having
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 later after a couple is mentally and financially prepared may result in a happy and stable family.
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