Some people believe that once a person becomes a criminal, he will always be a criminal. Do you agree with this statement?

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modern era, there is an increment of criminals in the world. Few masses believe that once a human becomes a culprit. he will never switch and he will always be an offender. I totally disagree with

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statement and pertinent arguments in upcoming paragraphs and

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will lead to a logical conclusion at

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. To embark, Not every person is a culprit by choice and those are the situations to become it

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as mental problems, financial crises and many more. Those types of people get treatment from rehab centres and become normal. personally, I think the government should increase the number of rehab centres and they should give totally free treatment that's why there is a decrement in the crime rate.

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, sometimes they have a critical situation so citizen and government should understand their problems and helps those people.

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, change is always a good thing and we help them because of that they try to change their life. Looking at the other hand, few criminals become by their choice and there are several ways to earn money but sometimes they want to earn cash fast and easily

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why they

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other capital and think they earn rapidly and those type of human does not differentiate their behaviour.

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to that, Here, I give an example of a South movie. In that film, the hero has a mental problem and his role as a thief he

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cash from banks and rich

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that money in the market. It

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in a room so we should try to diversity them and solve their problems. To summarize above the paragraphs, everyone is not the culprit by their choice but sometimes they have a critical condition because of that I do not agree with that notion.

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Apr 8, 2023

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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