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The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014.

The graph below shows the average house prices in 3 countries between the years 1997-2014.
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the line graph provides information about the cost of houses in 3 particular nations from 1997 to 2014.
overall
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, the average house
price
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 in all surveyed countries followed an upward trend throughout the period. remarkably, the figure for
country
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 c headed the list with a significant increase. turning to the detail, the
price
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 of houses in
country
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 c
initially
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 grew from roughly $100 to $150 in 1991
,
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 and
then
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 recorded a dramatic increase to over $500 until 1993, after which
this
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 category witnessed a slight drop in 1996.
at the end
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 of the period, the house
price
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 in
country
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 c hit its peak of approximately $600. the cost of houses in
country
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 A
also
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 shot up during the given time, but more steadily than in the aforementioned nation, rising from $100 in 1991 to $250 in 1997 before experiencing a considerable drop in 1998 and ending at $240.
in addition
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, the house
price
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 in
country
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 b followed a mounting trajectory from 1991 to 1995, increasing by roughly $100.
however
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, between 1996 and 1998, there was a remarkable fall in
this
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 figure. after that, a recovery was recorded
at the end
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 of the period, finishing with approximately $ 500.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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