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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table displays data about the
budget
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 of Britain police whilst the two pie charts provide details on how it was allocated between 2017 and 2018.
According to
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 an
overall
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 perspective,
it is clear that
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sources
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 of funding showed an upward trend, with Local Taxes being the largest financial support. Conspicuously, the amount of money spent on officers' and staff's salaries was the majority of distribution which outnumbered the Technology and Buildings and transports sectors.
Initially
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 observing the
sources
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 of the Police allowance, National Government registered the highest contribution to the police's
budget
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 which slightly rose by 2.3
million
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pounds
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, from 175.5 to 177.8
million
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pounds
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 in the given period.
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 was followed by the aplenty of Local Taxes which was a significant upsurge by over 11
million
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pounds
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 to reach 102.3
million
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pounds
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 in 2018
while
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Sources
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 (
such
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 as grants) accounted for only a fraction of
sources
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 at around 38
million
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pounds
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 in two years. Regarding
budget
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 allocation, the percentage of the
budget
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 allocated to
officers'
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officers
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 and staff's salaries witnessed a dramatic decrease from 75% to 69%, followed by Buildings and transport which remained the same at 17% over the period.
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, the figure for Technology occupied nearly a twofold increase from 8% to 14% but still the lowest
budget
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 allocation.
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