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THE PIE CHART SHOW THE REASONS PEOPLE IN GREAT BRITIAN HAD FOR VISITING ART MUSEUMS IN THE YEARS 1990 and 2000

THE PIE CHART SHOW THE REASONS PEOPLE IN GREAT BRITIAN HAD FOR VISITING ART MUSEUMS IN THE YEARS 1990 and 2000
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The two pie charts display the
reasons
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 why tourists from England visited art
museums
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 in 1990 and 2000.
Overall
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, both charts reveal that the primary motive behind visiting
museums
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 was to gain knowledge and learn something new.
In contrast
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, the least popular
reason
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 was to appreciate art pieces.
However
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, there was a difference in the second most common
reason
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 for visiting
museums
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 between the two years. In 1990, the second purpose was to schedule free time,
whereas
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, in 2000, it was to attend unique exhibitions. To provide a more detailed analysis, obtaining knowledge was the most significant factor in attracting people to
museums
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, accounting for approximately 45% of the
reasons
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 in both years. In 1990, the second most common
reason
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 was to fill their schedules, with a percentage of 27%, but it fell to fifth place in 2000, with only 12% of visitors citing it as their
reason
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 for visiting. In both years, spending time with friends and family and participating in special events were equally popular, accounting for 12% of the
reasons
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 in 1990.
However
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, in 2000, there was a significant increase in the number of visitors who preferred participating in special events, accounting for about 18% of the
reasons
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, museums, reason with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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