The pie charts Below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010

The pie charts Below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010
the two Pies chart gives information about the proportion of
household
expenditure
in six Major categories,
hence
, from 1950 and 2010 in one country.
Overall
,
initially
, the average
household
expenditure
in 1950, had only one biggest slice was housing,
while
other slice showed a steady average without the
Food
Part,
Whereas
, in 2010 the major category begin with
food
then
housing and others have the same proportion. as we see in these two pie charts, will begin with, Average
household
expenditure
in the year 1950
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The large slice was housing had an average of 72.1 per
cent
while
others , health care and transportation, were the same average between 2.4 and 4.4 per
cent
,
in contrast
,
food
was the second category, had 11,2 per
cent
and
then
education at 6,6 proportion, comparatively with 2010, the average
household
expenditure
, the highest piece was in
food
34,0 per
cent
,
in addition
, Housing and other remains the same in the percentages,
while
in transportation has 14 per
cent
of users, in the
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the health care increased by 2 per
cent
, compared with the year 1950,
also
education remained constant in both years.
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