All The internet allows us to stay connected each other no atter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extend do you agree or disagree with these statements?

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a lot of
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agree or disagree. In terms of
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, The
internet
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people
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out with
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their
friends they don,t
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. To illustrate, They are using the
internet
by phone or anything else.
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they will get
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and maybe will go back home.
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, Maybe the
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good thing.
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and send
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massage
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one of them
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news
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any website,
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, Facebook,Instagram and Twitter.
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films
instead
of TV. In
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,
although
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people
believe the
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drawback
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. I agree
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that the
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thing in our life. Because it
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us
easy
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life.
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we depend on it
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a lot of things.
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we can study
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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