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some people think that mobiles are harmful for children , while others diagree. Discusse both side and give your opinion

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Technology has evolved and impacted
this
 current generation in various ways. A few numbers of people believe that smartphones cause bad effects on
children
, and I agree
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them with.
Although
 mobile phones provide information and knowledge to them through different media and platforms. The negative outweighs the positive effects
such
 as affecting the
children
's emotional state and the
time
 they spend with family or friends. In
this
 ,
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 I will
further
 discuss
this
 issue and provide my concluding view.
Firstly
, it is an undeniable fact that the Internet and mobile phones give
children
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plenty amount of information and learnings that people around them do not randomly provide.
For example
, videos on Youtube about
children
's songs and rhymes improve their cognitive skills.
In addition
, there are quite a few contents made especially for kids' basic knowledge that they can learn in advance
while
 out they are out of school. In general, they absorb these data faster
due to
 the colourful presentation and how convenient to access them on a small device.
Although
 the advantages were mentioned above, there are people who are still not convinced that mobile devices are harmful to young audiences. One reason is it affects their patience, play and family
time
. What I mean by
this
 is
children
 who are given numerous hours of phone
use
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 tend to be impatient and irritated when they can't get what they want, which can lead to severe bad habits in the future.
Also
,
time
 wasted on the internet
instead
 of quality bonding with family and playing with friends may have a big impact on their character development in the long run. I strongly believe that the more we let these young generations engage in social platforms on the internet, it will greatly impact their way of life in the near future. In conclusion,
although
 smart devices have many advantages
such
 as the advancement of knowledge for
children
 and acquiring information through various platforms, it is evident that the disadvantages outweigh these. An unstable emotional state is one of the major reasons,
secondly
, lack of
time
 for playing and bonding with family could greatly impact their future development.
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