IELTS Letter Writing / GT Writing Task 1: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have recently moved to a new neighbourhood and would like to join a sports centre there. You have found a private sports club. Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter, introduce yourself say why are you interested in this sports club ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc. Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Sir, I am Simi and I moved to a Payal apartment

last

month. I am writing

this

letter in regard to the Santokh private

sport

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sports

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club

as I am interested in joining the

club

. I am an Early Child Educator and

Working

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Work

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in the

little bubble

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Little Bubble

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day care

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daycare

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that is

located in our Neighborhood. There are plenty of reasons for me to join the

sport

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sports

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club

as from my childhood I have been keen to play basketball and

also

a good player of basketball.

In addition

this

, I have heard that your

sport

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club

has an excellent basketball team, and your teaching method is unique

as well as

you have well-trained and qualified coaches. I want to learn from your

club

and want to become a member of your society. I would be interested in finding out more about the wait-list fees if no spot is available right now

as well as

facilities like gym, spa and reserved parking are provided by your

club

. I want to know

enrollment

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the enrollment

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and registration fees

as well as

monthly

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the monthly

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fees of the

club

In addition

this

, I have heard that you offer the first month's membership free and a 3-

days

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day

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free trial for newcomers and I want to ask whether it is still available

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I am really forward to hearing from you soon and Thanks for your cooperation. Yours Sincerely, Simi.

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coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph clearly introduces and develops a single idea related to the letter's purpose, maintaining clear topic sentences and logical progression.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriately formal, contributing positively to the tone of the correspondence.

task achievement

The letter has addressed the main bullet points but should include more details or development to fully satisfy the task requirements.

task achievement

The overall tone is mostly suitable, though some minor informal elements could be adjusted to maintain a consistently formal tone appropriate for writing to a manager.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

232 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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