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In many countries schools have severe problems with students behaviour.What are the causes and possile solutions for this problem.

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The rebellious nature of
children
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 is always a concern in society.
school
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 encounter it most as students spend a major proportion of their time in institutes. it is happening owing to the negligence in parenting
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 excessive freedom given to the
children
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however
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 it can be mitigated by taking rational steps by schools
as well as
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 parents.
to begin
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school
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 is the place where adequate behaviour is required to maintain an appropriate learning environment.
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 students misbehave because of poor parenting by their families.
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, learners ignore the disciplinary instructions as they do not have any sense of responsibility developed. apart from that in many nations,
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 the family
structure
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children
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 have more relaxation to do whatever they want.
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, in China owing to the single-child policy, parents pamper their
children
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 more than necessary and try to provide whatever they want. it will hamper their child's development of rational thinking. when they go to
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 they want the same what they get at home;
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, the
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 has to cater to each and every student equally.
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 will become the cause of the disruption.
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,
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 problem can be sorted out by involving parents in academy management and disciplinary committee. for ,example many countries like India, have a committee called SMC which ensures every juvenile gets proper care and follow a code of conduct. it provides a sense of alertness among
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.
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, they perform better in an academic environment. Another prominent step is taking appropriate action against the scholar who breaks the norms issued by the
school
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. To exemplify it if a student has the fear of punishment in their mind
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 the student tries to indulge less in
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 unwanted activities. in ,
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 it will provide an example for others as well.
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, students are causing
disturbence
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disturbance
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the
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the excessive freedom and poor parenting. it can be
counterd
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countered
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 by using appropriate steps
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 as giving punishment
whenver
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whenever
 required and forming a committee.
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