The graph shows fast food consumption among men and women in 2015.

The graph shows fast food consumption among men and women in 2015.
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The bar chart compares males and females
as well as
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four
age
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cohorts regarding how many
calories
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they gained each day eating fast
food
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in the year 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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by
age
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, both genders consumed less amount of fast
food
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, and
this
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food
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was more consumed by men in comparison to the opposite sex in general. The youngest
age
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group, aged from 18 to 34, consumed the highest amount of
calories
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on a daily basis. Males obtained more
calories
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than females, at almost 18 and 16 % respectively. The middle-aged
age
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bracket, who were between 35 and 64, showed a similar percentage of daily calorie intake. The figure for those who were above 35 years old was almost the same, at around 10 %.
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, people aged 50-64 took in fewer
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, with below 10 %. The retirees, who were above 65, were the least active fast
food
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consumers. Both males and females ate almost the same number of
calories
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a day, at more than 4 % and fewer than 4 % each.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, calories, food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • fast food consumption
  • men
  • women
  • 2015
  • compare
  • contrast
  • differences
  • reasons
  • solutions
  • excessive
  • address
  • issue
  • recap
  • final thought
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