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Universities should provide students with the skills they will require in order to succeed at their future jobs. How far do you agree ar disagree with the above opinion?

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After finishing school, many
students
 make different applications to
universities
 in order to earn a degree which may help to secure a
future
 job. The process of learning at these institutes is currently
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 whether it should provide its
students
to
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 fit in their
future
 carrier or not. In
this
 essay, I will explain why
universities
 are obligated to do so. The reputation of different
universities
 is highly evaluated in the community despite the difficulties needed to obtain a university degree. In fact, many employers may search for particular university graduates and offer them good salaries in order to secure their own companies.
This
 example means that work offers trust in the education and
skills
 offered at these institutes for selecting the
future
 working force. Meanwhile,different colleges collect many fees to offer their services. As their
students
 struggle to cover the educational expenses, there is a right for these institution members to be taught the necessary
skills
 to be fit in
future
 jobs.
This
 in turn will build community confidence towards that learning faculty.
However
, learning
skills
 is a process that has no limits in terms that it is not only confined to the university campus. It may be developed afterwards. But unless these
students
 don't have the opportunity to try these
skills
 during their learning period, they will be confused once they leave the studying phase which may end up with insufficiency that puts their
future
 job in danger. In conclusion, the current studying system depends on
universities
 as institutes to deliver not only science but
also
skills
. Once the trust in
this
 system is broken there will be no reference for the community to establish or join a new job.
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