Some school leavers go travelling or work for a period of time instead of going directly to university. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages for their study?

In today’s world, some students are willing to

work

or travel for a

while

before starting

the

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education at

university

. Working and travelling after finishing school has both advantages and disadvantages. From my perspective, it has more drawbacks than benefits. I will elaborate on

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further

. One of the advantages of working and travelling before commencing education at the

university

that

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students could learn how to rely on themselves.

Afterwards

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their early self-reliance ability could impact their

life

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positively.

For example

, their chances to interact with people and how

to

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communicate with them could be high.

Also

,

the

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negotiation skills would be upgraded

due to

the gained experience.

Furthermore

, they will be able to allocate the budget

by

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their own. For

the

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reason

of

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that some parents support the

children’

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idea to

work

or travel for a particular period of time. There are more negative sides

of

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having

a

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work

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work

or travelling

instead

of going to

the

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university

.

Firstly

, graduates are young and they don’t have enough life experience, so they could get themselves in trouble easily.

Secondly

, they spend less time with

parents

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, if they

work

or travel which means they will be under limited supervision.

Consequently

, it could lead to unpleasant outcomes like getting under the influence of a bad company or committing illegal activities. One of the

downside

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of working before joining the

university

is having some difficulties in their learning when they get back to

educational

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institute. As they get used to

live

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in a comfort zone working and travelling, their ability to learn a new subject and

perceiving

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information could be slowed down.

To sum up

, entering

the

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university

after graduating

school

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would be

better

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decision rather than working and travelling.

Thus

, it could cause some problems in their discipline.