Too much money is spent in maintaining and repairing old buildings, some people think they should be knocked down and give way to modem building. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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amount of money goes to
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and repair
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old buildings. That others would argue that
instead
of fixing it should be demolished and replaced with
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building. I partially agree, as I believe that it's impractical to keep old
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as
this
is expensive and needs a lot of
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.
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giving way to new infrastructure will keep people safe,
as well as
will boost the community. On
one
hand,
although
old buildings are considered part of
history
in
one
's place
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to keep it good as it was, it needs delicate maintenance and repair which could be costly.
Therefore
, if it is not that significant it would be practical to tear it down and replace
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structure as
this
will not only give
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image of the community,albeit it can save more money that could be used for other purposes.
In addition
, keeping old building
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structure
is unsafe for
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. In Jordan,
for instance
, decades ago the building collapsed during the wedding reception as it was not able to withstand the
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weight
of the people in the reception hall.
On the other hand
, I believe that there are things to consider in before knocking down an old building,
the
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history
and
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its significance
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in
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society. Since building structure
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an important role in identifying
one
's culture.
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in Ilocos
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province
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, their houses and street building are built during the
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colonial, breaking it down would mean removing a part of
one
's culture,
history
, and economy, as
this
also
became
a
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most
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visit
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place as it
attract
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many
tourist
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both local and abroad. In conclusion, I would argue that to keep an old building is expensive and impractical,
however
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some points
needs
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to consider since some old
building
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buildings
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have
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had a significant share of our
history
that often attracts
tourist
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tourists
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around the globe that help boost
country's
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the country's
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socio-economic.
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,
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I acknowledge the risk to the people as it is not safe to stay in old buildings since physical
structure
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structures
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are weaken
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by
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time.
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