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Universities should provide students with the skills they will require in order to succeed at their future jobs. How far do you agree ar disagree with the above opinion?

#universities #students #skills #future #jobs #ar
Some individuals believe that universities have to offer
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students
 some opportunities to gain
thier
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their
 abilities for their
future
 occupations. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
this
 idea because
students
 might have not determined their
future
 yet and they can learn
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practical
skills
 outside of
college
.
To begin
 with, many university
students
 have not decided what they want to be in the
future
 because they are still not familiar with what occupation is suitable
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themselves
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.
Therefore
, it is difficult to gain a certain skill during
college
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time
for
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increasing the ability might become wasteful.
For instance
, there were many practical classes that I could take when I was
college
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 student but I realized that all those classes were not
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necessary
 for me when I look for a
job
.
Moreover
, if the
students
 have an ideal occupation in the
future
 already, there are tons of
school
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schools
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 where they can learn the
skills
 that help for their
future
job
. Since it is not all
of
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students
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 know their ideal occupation at that moment, it is not
nessesary
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necessary
 that universities
offer
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the
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students
the
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classes where they can study their practical
skills
.
For example
, if a student wants to be an
acountant
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accountant
, they can learn
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specific
skills
 in
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school outside of
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college
while
 they are studying academic subjects
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 the university. In conclusion, personally, I strongly disagree with the opinion that
college
offer
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students
 the opportunity for learning
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practical
skills
 to
success
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their
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future
job
 because many people are still looking for their ideal
job
 and there
many
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institution
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 where they can learn
the
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practical
skills
 outside of colleges.
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