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more and more people are moving to big cities why do you think this is happening? is this a positive or negative development?

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The majority of the population is trying to transport their
life
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 to a bigger city, leaving the countryside,which becomes a common phenomenon in the contemporary epoch.The forthcoming paragraphs will demonstrate some of the causes of
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 hype ,
as well as
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 its impact on society.
To begin
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 with, in the
last
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 2 decades, a huge
number
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 of
people
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 migrate from their home town to larger cities, whether they were living in a smaller one or in rural areas.A
number
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 of reasons could cause
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 action.
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, a considerable
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 of citizens transport to advanced cities, especially those who are married or have a family. As they consider living there gives them convenient services at a various
number
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 of amenities.
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 , living there is costing more finances ,but it
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 offers acceptable salaries, which definitely is higher than where they live previously .not only that but
also
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 being able to live in
such
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 a place provides better opportunities career-wise, namely, it is more likely to establish start-ups in bigger towns.
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, moving to a new place will have its consequences.It became noticeable that places, which
people
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 just moved to, are usually suffering from traffic
jam
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consequently
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people
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 ,who live there,will struggle with air pollution.
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, with higher numbers leaving the countryside that will directly affect jobs ,namely, farming
as well as
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 small facilities in unknown locations.
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 it will offer a competitive environment in the professional
life
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 of
people
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 , who are still young, offering them a convenient
life
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 at younger ages. In conclusion, moving to a bigger city ,which offers better
life
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 chances , is a huge decision,which comes with a
lot
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 advantages in your
life
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. In my opinion, changing your
life
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 in a bigger city has advantages overweigh its disadvantages.
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 why it has a positive impact on the individual’s
life
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,
although
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 it comes with consequences you should pay attention to.
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