The maps show the park which was built in 1920 and current construction of the park.

The maps show the park which was built in 1920 and current construction of the park.
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The given maps illustrate Grange Park,which was built in 1920, and its facilities at now and in 1920.
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, one of the
rose
gardens , which was located between
seats
,
is
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preserved its location. Other facilities are changed over time. First and foremost, one entrance is provided for an underground car park at the southeast corner of the park. Before the water feature is constructed beside the new entrance, a glasshouse and
seats
were placed there in 1920. The right corner of the map is revealed two different facilities
such
as a
rose
garden and pond for water plants in 1920. Nowadays these are replaced by café and children's play
area
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respectively.It is true that in the centre of the map was contained a fountain which was demolished
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unknown time. Today the same area is covered by many
seats
and a
rose
garden. One of the other changes can be observed left side of the new map. There was a stage for musicians for certain events. It was demolished and the area is extended for the new building which is Amphitheatre. It is certain that the total number of
seats
have
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remained the same, but it doesn't the same as the
rose
gardens.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rose, seats with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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