The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
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bar chart depicts some modifications in the proportion of Australian
people
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who were born in foreign nations living in urban, countryside and towns from 1995 to 2010. It's clear from the graph that the most percentages of accommodation are in
cities
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for Australian
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and Non-Australian.
According to
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what is shown, the
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who were born outside
Australia
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have various percentages during these years. We can see in 1995 the lowest
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of residents which they are living in town and countryside residents represented 40 per
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and in
cities
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shows the biggest
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which is 60 per
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in 2010 the
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of city residents remained increasing soared to about twenty per
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and the town has no change that match.
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the
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born in
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have not changed a lot during
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decade and a half. We can see in 1995 the proportion of rural areas accommodation is about 25 per
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and in towns represent 20%
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people
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in
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shows about 45%. After nearly 15 years the
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of
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in
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increased slightly by about a quarter and the percentages of the countryside, and towns accommodation have the same per
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which is about 18 per
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.
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, we could say that the ratio of
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who were born in
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has not changed a lot in numbers during these years
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the
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Who were born outside
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have a huge difference as we can see in the graph.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cities, australia, percentage, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • urbanization
  • migration patterns
  • population distribution
  • percentage points
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend analysis
  • socioeconomic factors
  • infrastructure development
  • rural exodus
  • census data
  • lifestyle changes
  • residential patterns
  • immigration policies
  • emigration
  • natural increase
  • birth rate
  • settlement patterns
  • push and pull factors
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