some people think that the media should be for entertainment only, while others believe that media should have educational values. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

It is believed that the
media
should have only
entertainment
values. Other
people
,
however
, think that the
media
should have
education
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values. Personally, I agree with the second group. On the one hand, the
entertainment
value of the
media
is undeniable. Nowadays, there are many
entertainment
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entertainments
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shows on television and other
media
, and the content of it is abundant and funny, and it shows on many
media
,
such
as radio,
television
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and television
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.
For instance
, Thank God you are here is the most popular comedy show on television.
Besides
, publishing magazines or newspapers is not difficult, many producers publish
the
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magazines,
newspapers
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and newspapers
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with funny
contents
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content
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still attract readers.
On the other hand
, the educational values of the
media
should intensify. The reason is that programs in the
media
affect viewers strongly.
For instance
, on Tiktok or YouTube,
people
can easily see the education channels mixed with
the
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negative channels. Viewers can
awake
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awaken
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to choose positive programs.
Besides
, the joining of famous
people
in social
media
creates a trend for their fans.
People
, especially children, can copy their actions
with
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without
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unawareness. In conclusion,
although
the
media
brings benefits from
entertainment
to
people
, I agree with the point of view that the educational benefits are needed to intensify.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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