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Universities should provide students with the skills they will require in order to succeed at their future jobs. How far do you agree or disagree with the above opinion?

#universities #students #skills #future #jobs
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"The more you learn, the more you grow” is undoubtedly the best thing a person can follow to get success these days. Educational centres need to focus more on nourishing the practical
skills
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 of their
students
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 these days.
This
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 topic followed by a conclusion.
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 with, most
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the
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businesses
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the
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employees with experience, it becomes hard for
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new
students
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 to get a
job
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 easily. There are some of the courses in
universities
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 as carpentry, automobile designing,
construction
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 that can only be useful if taught with
practical
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 rather than cramming the chapters of the books. So, the education sector should focus more on providing these
skills
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 to the
students
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 so they can easily get
to
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the
job
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 they want once they finish the course. It will help them to learn the ongoing problems they will face
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 performing their
jobs
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. If
students
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 grab these
skills
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, with practice at the college they will not have to check the books if they got an issue during the task.
According to
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 a survey by ‘the
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’, more than 40
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 of the
students
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 were able to get
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 way easier based on the experience they got
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 learning at the school.
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, there are some of the
skills
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 that should be taught in
universities
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,
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 as communication
skills
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, organizational behaviour, General problems at workplaces
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etcetera
. These
skills
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 are the requirements of every
job
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 these days, if these basic
skills
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 are introduced to the
students
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,
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 it will benefit not only the
students
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 but the
universities
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 as well.
On the other hand
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,
students
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 who got
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the basis of the job
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jobs
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 basis on the marks on the sheet with no proper learning of the
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, suffered
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a lot of issues at their first workplace, as mentioned by a report in a magazine. I totally agree, with the statement that these educational firms should teach the
students
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 the
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 they need to acquire so that they can easily get their desired
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 in
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 competitive environment.
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with
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,
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colleges and
universities
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 should focus more on nourishing these basic
skills
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such
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 as communicational
skills
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, the practical examples should be given to the
students
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 of the skill-based trades
such
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 as salon master
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etcetera
, so that the
students
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 can easily make
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 the
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jobs
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 based on their
skills
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.
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