You are currently taking a course at a college but you will need to have a week off during this course. Write a letter to the college Principal. In the letter Give details of your course - Advance Diploma in Mechanical Engineering Technology with major in Industrial Design, currently in fifth semester. Explain why you need a week off - Due to Robotics and software Expo in the USA. Would lovea an opportunity to explore the future posibilities in both fields as well as expand my professional network. Say what you want the Principal to do - request all the recorded lectures as well as an additional week to catch-up all the study and assignements.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope that you are doing well. The purpose of

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letter is to seek permission for a week off in the October month

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professional reasons. I am pursuing an

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diploma in

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Mechanical Engineering Technology with

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major in Industrial Design, currently in the fifth semester.

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to that, I have

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enrolled in a few

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Computer Science courses.

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, I would like to request

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a leave of absence for five days in the next month, as I would like to

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Robotics and Software Expo in the USA. Because

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perfect opportunity for me to explore the future

posibilities

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possibilities

in both fields

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expand my professional network.

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that, I would

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request

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for

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all the

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recording

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during my leave.

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but not least, an additional week to

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all

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the study and assignments will be

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required. I hope

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letter has provided you with enough information to grant my leave application. Thank you for your time and consideration.

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faithfully, Ruchin Patel

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that paragraph breaks are used to separate different points more clearly.

task achievement

Make sure to proofread for minor grammatical errors.

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Try to use more varied vocabulary to enhance the quality of the writing.

coherence cohesion

The letter has a clear structure with appropriate greetings and closing.

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The purpose of the letter is clearly stated and well-explained.

coherence cohesion

The request is precise, and the rationale is connected well to the course content.

task achievement

The writing tone is professional and suitable for the context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

182 words

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