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Some people think that products should be made to last as long as possible, while others think making the products cheap is more important.

#people #products
Most
people
 weigh up the quality and price of their purchase. Some
people
 argue that durability should be key for the product
while
 others think it is better to make the
products
 affordable. Personally, I believe both
businesses
 and individuals should make responsible decisions regarding product manufacturing and usage. The main reason why the product should be durable is that it can reduce the environmental footprint. The longer
people
 can use
products
, the slower landfill will become.
However
,
,
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people
 these days tend to purchase new
products
 before their existing ones become obsolete, especially for technology and electronic gadgets.
This
 buying behaviour drives
businesses
 to research and manufacture new
products
 more. The whole process from extraction of raw material to packaging and delivering of end
products
 to consumers produces a substantial amount of carbon emission which has a detrimental impact on the environment. From a consumer’s perspective, durable
products
 enhance the user’s experience and save money in the long term as the users don’t need to change the
products
 often.
On the other hand
, some
people
 believe that making the
products
 affordable can bring benefits as more
people
 can access the
products
 equally.
For example
, compared to the
last
 few decades, many
people
 are now able to purchase laptops for less than a thousand dollars for their studies and career purposes.
This
 won’t happen without the attempt of
businesses
 to manufacture at an economic scale and make things affordable. In my opinion,
businesses
 shouldn’t prioritize quantity at the expense of quality. All
businesses
 should be ethically and socially responsible. Their
products
 should meet all the minimum standards and the manufacturing process should be designed in
such
 as way to minimize the environmental footprint. Consumers should
also
 opt for those
products
 in an act of supporting their business activities. The battle between quality and affordability will be endless.
However
, both
businesses
 and consumers should do their part to make our earth more sustainable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • durability
  • sustainability
  • longevity
  • affordability
  • consumerism
  • waste
  • environmental impact
  • value for money
  • customer satisfaction
  • brand loyalty
  • consumption
  • economic growth
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