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Nowadays we see an increase in social problems involving teenagers. Many people believe that it is because parents spend more time at work and less with their children. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays more
people
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that
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 helpful experience which
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 skills. On the one hand, moving have benefits, but on the other hand, there are drawbacks and
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 issue which be discussed and solved. In
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 both sides will be explained and supported with examples. First of all, learning
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 is a difficult process which
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 every week studying something new. Honestly, if
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 not can speak every week, he forgets
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 very fast.
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 studying
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 give a lot of benefits.
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, you can speak with
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other
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 to
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 you learning other cultures,
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and understanding
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tradition
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. And moving
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 moving
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 where that
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have
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 drawbacks.
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. Unfortunately,
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 have problems with government and culture. They do not understand
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 because do not
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 it.
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,
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a person
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person
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people
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 have
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 effect.
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,
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eat
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 because
them
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body
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, I want to say that
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in
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country
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 where live speakers
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language
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. It
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 a lot of benefits, but it has drawbacks.
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 my opinion
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person
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a person
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need
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move
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other
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another country
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country
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 for learning new tradition, culture,
law
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and law
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. And you can improve not only
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 of peace yourself but
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 you know yourself.

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