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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend , while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences . Discuss both sides of this argument and give your own opinion

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Digitalized gadgets are often used in learning.
Although
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persons
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 believe that it is a good development, others opine that
this
 leads to
detrimental
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outcome
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.
This
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 of
views
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 and
also
 explain why in my opinion, the former idea is worth supporting than the
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. On the
one
 hand, there are various points against the
use
 of computers for academic purposes.
Firstly
, it does not encourage good academic performance.
This
 is because too many distractions exist online and learners
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 the
time
 allocated for learning for other trivial things
such
 as surfing from
one
 social media to another or chatting with friends. They may even decide to watch movies other than
studying
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. To illustrate, Mc Demian in his research, found out that 80% of pupils utilizing computerized
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 for studying end up performing poorly
at the end
 of each academic session.
Secondly
, it is
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 an expensive means of learning.the reason for
this
 is that
alot
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a lot
 of resources are required
in
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 using
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 which
are
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 digital in nature to study. These
ranges
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 from
purchase
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 of
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 down to
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 of data in other to assess study materials.
On the other hand
, many reasons abound why others are in support of studying with computers.
To begin
, it makes learning across the globe possible.
This
 is so because
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one
 would not need to travel out of his or her country in other to acquire knowledge from another country. People can easily take online courses from another continent
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 the comfort of their homes.
For instance
, Ademola reported in PrimeTime newspaper that, he has been able to take numerous certification courses online from his
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 through the
use
 of his personal computer.
Finally
, studying and learning with technological
equipments
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 saves
time
. The reason for
this
 is that
,
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one
do
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 not have to search for study materials or
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 from
one
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textbooks
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 to the other, which is
time consuming
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. Rather, these can easily be accessed from online textbooks and e-books which will save them energy and
time
 for other activities. In conclusion, despite the contrasting views about the
use
 of computers for educational purposes, I
belief
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 that the
use
 of digital
equipments
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 can not be overemphasized.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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