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The table below illustrates how much money a single person and a couple in Australia need for a comfortable lifestyle after they retire.

The table below illustrates how much money a single person and a couple in Australia need for a comfortable lifestyle after they retire.
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The tabular chart depicts information about
difference
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the difference
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 between unmarried and married persons
how
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and how
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 much funds spend
for
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on
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 living
quality
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a quality
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 of life after
give
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giving
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 up their field. After analysing the table graph it can be seen clearly that a negligible
distnict
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district
 was seen in the amount of money
use
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 on transport in both categories.
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, 50$
are
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using
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used
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 on food by
a
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apply
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single retired people,
while
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 twofold via couples for a comfortable lifestyle. The number of spending capital on
accomodation
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accommodation
 was $184 and $196 in that groups, respectively. Moving
further
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, $140 is spent by
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a bachelor
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bachelor
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bachelors
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 on leisure,
whereas
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 it increased by $62
however
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, a difference of $1 was seen in the expenditure of cash on health. The utilization of money on clothing was $124 collectively in both categories.
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, partnerless humans $37 use on others and $70
spouse
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on spouse
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 and the total expense of single human beings
$
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is $
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684 and married retired commoners.
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, it is crystal clear that the maximum amount of money spend on housing in the former section, whilst in the
latter
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 the minimum dollars use on others.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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