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Computers are being used more and more in the education .some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences . Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your opinion

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Laptops are frequently used in learning. Few people believed that studying with
smartphones
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are
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 very helpful
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people
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 are pessimistic about the effect.
This
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 essay will highlight more on the good and bad results of studying with technological
gadgets
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. My own view will be discussed
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 idea
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 the former. On the one hand, there are various reasons attached to learning with
computers
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. First of all, it creates room for
research
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. Studying with
laptop
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a laptop
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 helps pupils to learn more about new technology through frequent searching of the
internet
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 thereby, widening their horizons and making them
to
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be versatile about new
internet
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 inventions and technical advancement.
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,John Basil,(2000) in his
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 work carried out on pupils
wth
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with
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 different studying materials, found out that most students that read with
computers
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 are smart and performs better in
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research
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the research
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 aspect than those who
studies
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study
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 with textbook and other reading materials.
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, learning with electrical
gadgets
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 saves time.
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 is because browsing through the
internet
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 either with
smartphones
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 or laptops still maintained the fastest means of providing solutions to
internet
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 problems
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,solving
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 yet there is
good
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a good
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 network and availability of data.
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, supporters of learning with
computers
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 have
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opinion
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opinions
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.
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, there is
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a high
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 rate of corruption. Exploring the
internet
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while
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 reading exposes the young generations to pornographic
movie
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movies
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 and sex information which are detrimental to their growing mind.
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, young pupils who are exposed to
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 films early in life
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 to grow up and became
nuisance
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 to
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society later in the future.
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, learning with digitalized
gadgets
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are
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 expensive to practice. Browsing through the
internet
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 requires data for
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its
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 operation.
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,
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minor citizens find it very difficult to afford
smartphones
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 or laptops. Moreso,
monthly
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a monthly
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 subscription is an additional cost on its own. To sum it all
, though
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, there is a positive
impact
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impacts
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 of studying with
smartphones
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such
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 as improvement in
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 findings and time management
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the
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negative effect like corruption and financial problems. Personally, I strongly believed that learning with
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computers
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computers'
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 harmful trend outweighs the good trend, in the sense that parents should be accountable
to
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 the type of studying
gadgets
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 their young ones make use of and should be able to provide
a learning tools
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learning tools
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 which they can afford.
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