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1.B.Nowadays, people are spending increasingly large amounts of money on their marriage parties. Many people feel large and expensive weddings cause problems for the bride and groom. Do you agree? Use personal examples in your response.

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every human need
merried
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married
 for the
completely
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 human life. recently, many
people
 wasted
much
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money
of
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on
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 their marriage
party
which
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because
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 the bride
want
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wants
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 to show feel charmed and do anything for their wedding
party
 with paid very expensive
for
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apply
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facilities
their
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for their
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 wedding
party
.
i
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I
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 agree with the statement because every person
have
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has
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decise
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decide
decided
 to remember about their wedding. many
people
 think married for live
one
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once
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 time so many
bride
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brides
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 to
decise
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decide
 for happy
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and memorable
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memorable
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memories
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 for their wedding
party
 and
their
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there
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 do not think about the budget for their wedding
party
.
the
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first
i
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I
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 agree because many
people
 think one
times
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time
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 for married so, many
people
 do
the
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their
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 best for
party
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the party
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.
for instance
, based on my experience,
i
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I
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 came from
poor
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a poor
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 family, but
i
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I
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 want to
married
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marry
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 with my
choosen
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chosen
men
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man
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.
however
,
i
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I
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 and my relationship work hard
for
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to give the best in my wedding
party
while
 no matter the
paid
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pay
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about
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the room, makeup,
eat
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eating
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 and all
facilities
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the facilities
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 wedding
party
.
nevertheless
, all
people
 think
same
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the same
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 like that me.
the
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second,
every pair
want
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towant
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 make
memorable
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it memorable
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 with
the
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a
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 happy ending and
cherfull
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cheerful
cheerfully
 for the wedding
party
.
for example
, many
people
 always show the photograph every session
in
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at
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wedding
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the wedding
a wedding
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party
.
i
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I
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 think no matter the cost
about
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of
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 the wedding
party
 the bride always
do
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does
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the
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her
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 best. in the conclusion, many
people
 want the best for
the
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apply
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their wedding
party
 how matter the cost
for
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of
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 facilities
in
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at
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wedding
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the wedding
a wedding
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party
, the relationship
feel
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feels
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 happy and memorable.
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