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The bar chart provides information about how often people in the USA spent ate fast food from 2003 to 2013.

The bar chart provides information about how often people in the USA spent ate fast food from 2003 to 2013.
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of
people
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 who ate
hotel
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food
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 in the USA during 2003 -2013.
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, most
people
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 ate fast
food
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 once a
week
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,
while
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 a small number of
people
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 ate fast
food
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 each day. In 2003, almost 4% of
people
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 consume fast
food
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 every day,
nevertheless
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, 5% were never eaten
hotel
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food
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. Around 31% and 30% of
people
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 consumed fast
food
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 one time a
week
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 and one or two
times
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 a month respectively.Below 17% of
people
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 ate fast
food
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 many
times
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 a
week
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 and a few
times
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 a year.
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, in the years 2006 and 2013, the consumption level of fast
food
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 was very high, which was approximately 33% of once a
week
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 and one or two
times
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 a month respectively.Almost 3% of
people
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 ate fast
food
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 every day
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, 4% never ate
hotel
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food
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 in both years.15% of
people
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 consumed fast
food
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 a few
times
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 a year. The percentage of
people
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 who consumed
hotel
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food
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 many
times
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 a
week
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 in the year 2013 was between 15% and 20%.

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