Nowadays more and more people are becoming obese and less involved in sporting activities. What do you think are the causes and possible effects of this problem?

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lot
of
people
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decrease
time
of
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on
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sporting
activities
,so more and more
people
are becoming obese.
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essay will show you what are the
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causes
courses
and possible effects of
this
problem.
On the other hand
, there are several reasons why a
lot
of
people
are becoming
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what
,and why
people
less
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are less
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involved in
sporing
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sporting
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activities
in today's world.The most reason is
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internet development.
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,
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a counpany
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counpany
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company
maked
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makes
make
that are very useful
applecation
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application
applications
.
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eats
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and so on. We do not have to go to
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the store
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, we just online
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order
.It is very useful,
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,however
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we are lessing moving.
For example
, we go to a
lot
of
shope
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shops
when shopping,and we a
lot
of spend
time
to
worlk
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work
when shopping.
However
,a
lot
of
people
use
online
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the online
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store
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. So internet development
while
we lessing
time
moving.
Such
as
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walking.
Secondly
,we do not have
time
.Students have a
lot
of homework and a
lot
of
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, and
also
we have to go to
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good
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university
because we get a nice
job
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jobs
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.So students spend a
lot
of
time
for
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study
steady
.
While
,
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adalt
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adults
adult
have to hard work because increasing my
currea
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current
and get a
lot
of income.So
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adult
spend a
lot
of
time
for work.
Moreover
,we can not sport easily.In Japan,the proportion of living
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city
are
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incresing
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increasing
from
time
to
time
. So,if they want to
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do sporting
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sporting
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activities
,they should join
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a clab
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clab
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club
activety
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activity
or team because Japan
do
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not have space for
spot
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a spot
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. In
counclsion
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conclusion
,
intenet
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Internet
development and do not have
time
are
cause
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the cause
a cause
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of more and more
people
are
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becoming
obse
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obese
and less involved in sporting
activities
.
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