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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

#students #study #colleges #universities #country
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Today a lot of
students
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 prefer to study at
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foreign countries' universities. There are several advantages and disadvantages of
this
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 view in my opinion.
To begin
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 with, there are lots of facilities and some reasons
to
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 many
students
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who
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want to study abroad.
Firstly
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, young people
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are interest
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interest
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 in new things, namely new
place
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places
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 or new friends or
new
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a new
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world
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. They consider that studying abroad
give
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 lots of good opportunities for them
such
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 as
students
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 can take new information about
world
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 and they will make friends with other culture people.
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, young
students
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 will learn many new technologies depending on their subjects or interests. That's
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 that they will have important knowledge from foreign educational organizations which
have
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 not
these
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 information
their
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 studying place or country. When these
students
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 come back to their country, they will teach learning methods from abroad to the next young generation.
On the other hand
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, there are some negative sides
of
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 studying foreign places.
Initially
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,
students
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 who feel emotional darkness,
for
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example
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 homesickness. They will
difficult
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 making new friends or new atmosphere.
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, they ought to learn some rules of
new
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 country and they can protect some bad groups of people. In conclusion,despite
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lots of negative sides, these days many
students
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 want to study
foreign
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at foreign
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 universities or colleges.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunities
  • personal growth
  • development
  • exposure
  • diverse
  • perspectives
  • language skills
  • job prospects
  • adapting
  • environment
  • financial considerations
  • costs
  • homesickness
  • social isolation
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