The diagram below describes the structure of a home smoker and how it works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below describes the structure of a home smoker and how it works.  

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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information on the process of how the home smoker works.
Overall
, we can clearly see that the working process of a home smokery consists of three main stages. And the major steps are realised in the underground except for the final one.
At the first stage
in the production of the
smoke
, we can see an empty underground section with a lid which can be opened at the space above the ground level. When the first lid of the home smokery is opened, fresh air can enter it freely .
Consequently
, it sinks and reaches the second area with the lid closed.
Then
the mixture of the logs and the fresh air is added to the fire in order to produce more and more
smoke
.
Next,
the
smoke
produced follows a pipe and enters a box which is on the ground. In
this
box, there is a lot of fish hanging on.
Finally
, with the
smoke
, those fishes can be created into the end products.
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