The diagram below describes the structure of a home smoker and how it works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below describes the structure of a home smoker and how it works.  

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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information on the process of how the home smoker works.
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, we can clearly see that the working process of a home smokery consists of three main stages. And the major steps are realised in the underground except for the final one.
At the first stage
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in the production of the
smoke
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, we can see an empty underground section with a lid which can be opened at the space above the ground level. When the first lid of the home smokery is opened, fresh air can enter it freely .
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, it sinks and reaches the second area with the lid closed.
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the mixture of the logs and the fresh air is added to the fire in order to produce more and more
smoke
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.
Next,
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the
smoke
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produced follows a pipe and enters a box which is on the ground. In
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box, there is a lot of fish hanging on.
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, with the
smoke
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, those fishes can be created into the end products.
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