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Some people believe that the death penalty can reduce crimes. Do you agree or disagree?

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in these recent days, people debate whether or not the
death
penalty
 has the power to decrease the proportion of crime in society, to be honest, I completely agree about
this
 belief, and
this
 essay will examine the reasons why
i
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 fully agree,
firstly
, statistics show a daily rise in crimes
such
 as robbery, murder in a cold blood and so on, despite the efforts of the government to reduce it but, in vain,
in other words
, criminals nowadays have the courage to commit terrible acts because the jail is more comfortable than the streets,
moreover
, food availability, protection guarantee,
for instance
, and from my own experience, in my neighbourhood some young people steal to enter the jail in purpose, because they are jobless and can not finance their needs,
secondly
, the
penalty
death
instead
 of a prison cell is the one and the only solution to reduce the crime rate,
as well as
 frighten the criminals rather than encouraging them, based on the actual statistics the crime rate is significantly lower where the
penalty
death
 is applied,
such
 as Kingdom of Saudi Arabia, it happens to be the country where the criminal thinks thousand times before committing lawful acts,
otherwise
, his life could be on the edge, another example of Yemen, the rape abuse is considered as capital punishment, more severe law should be applied because murders tend to underestimate the consequences of the act,
to conclude
, I fully agree that the
death
penalty
 can play a major role to help the government tackle lawbreaking and criminality as soon as possible, and make attempted murders reconsider their acts,
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