Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. Agree? disagree?

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argue that
younger
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generation should
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for free in their spare
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, which would be beneficial for them and society as a whole. I strongly agree with
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the following paragraphs.
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,
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who participate in
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community activities have more opportunities to meet a lot of
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from different regions and backgrounds.They can see all aspects of life through which they will learn how to communicate with folks who have
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different characteristics, have
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compassion for each other and how to
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in a group.
Besides
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that,
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participating in
participating
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activities
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the perfect
time
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for children to develop skills
such
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as
time
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management, communication, and problem-solving, which are strong points for them to compete with other candidates when
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looking
for future
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.
On the other hand
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, it
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brings a lot of benefits to the community.
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, the local environment does not need to spend the budget to hire
people
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and
work
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.They may spend that funds on health or education.
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, working as a
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for free,
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could reduce crime and robbery in the country. Taking everything into
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consideration, parents should allow their children
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work
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for free as
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a volunteer
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volunteer
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in their free
time
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, because it has a great
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advantage
both
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for both
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society and
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the adolscent
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adolscent
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adolescent
adolescents
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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