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Do children behave better when they are physically punished or rewarded?

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Nowadays,
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 are considered the future of the nation and how they should be raised is a debatable issue. Some people believe that they should be exposed to
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physical punishment
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 others think that constant appreciation is required
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 them. As far as I am concerned, these arguments need proper
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 before forming an opinion. To embark on, there are many benefits of conferring rewards to
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 first of all, appreciation and verbal praise can have a magical impact on the behaviour of the
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 because when they are appreciated for good conduct they come to know about the value of good behaviour and try to keep continue with that. The more they brim with positive comments, the more they can be confident.
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,
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 who are subjected to artificial and physical punishment are seen with a lack of self-confidence. A groundbreaking survey has been carried out by Oxford University supporting the fact that
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than 30% of
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 are exposed to punitive actions and parents could be more aggressive and furious than others .
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, beatings
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 a child can never be fruitful.
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, there is no denying the fact that training to the notorious and ferocious mind is a hard nut to crack because it is true that rod only logic for the fools. It is an indisputable fact that some
children
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 repeat mistakes even after being warned and punished,
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 type of stubbornness can force parents and guardians to give them beatings. Needless to say, over-pampering may have an adverse effect on
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. In
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 and their pampering
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 away from their path. As a way of conclusion,
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tender buds and nurturing them is a major responsibility.
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, a fair judgement on behaviour is needed for
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 upbringing.
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