The best way to motivate employees is to increase their salaries. Do you agree with this statement? Are there any other ways to encourage employees to work more efficiently?

The world that we live
today
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is dominated by
salary
challenge
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. I am adamant that,
staff
will
work
more efficiently with high salaries, but I disagree that
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it is the best way to encourage them
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motivated.
To begin
with, the fact that we cannot escape from
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salary
complaint
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is a significant cause for employers to find
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a solution
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solution
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solutions
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for
effective
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an effective
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outcome
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. First of all, it may be offered to choose
staff
of the month every month which may affect and create additional interest to
work
hard.
Moreover
, companies may give
bonus
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bonuses
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for
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workers end of every month of
year
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the year
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.
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The employee
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Employee
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Employees
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will be automatically authentic to galvanize every project around
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company.
Furthermore
, it may increase competition among
staff
inside the company.
On the other hand
, despite of high
salary
attraction, I strongly believe that
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it is not the best way to rocket fruitful
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of
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companies. In the same way, flexible workers find themselves in great demand
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and
consequently
gain high
salary
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salaries
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.
In
addition
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groups which look for various ways to attract their
staff
such
as offering them
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a discount
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discount
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discounts
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on
the
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clothes,
such
perks of the job undoubtedly will dramatically raise their admiration to
work
efficiently. What is more, there
are
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some kind of members
which
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needs merely career growth and sometimes simple kind and
encouriging
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encouraging
words are more than enough for them. In conclusion,
although
salary
is one of the most important aspects of business life, it is not the most vital, and a fee increase is not the most effective solution for employees to
work
effectively.
In addition
, motivating employees with various bonuses and rewards will have a more beneficial effect on monthly and annual production efficiency.
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