Around the world it is likely that more adults will work from home, and more children will study from home, as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this will be a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, the use of computer

technology

has been increasing among all ages of

people

. It is sometimes thought that more

children

will

study

from

home

and more adults will

work

from

home

because the digital medium and

technology

become cheaper and

people

can easily access them from

home

. In my opinion,

this

development

will be beneficial for adults and will be harmful

for

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children

Firstly

, I would like to express my opinion

why

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on why

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this

development

is helpful for working

professional

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professionals

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. One of the reasons is that

people

, who will

work

from

home

in the future, have enough

time

to spend

time

with their families and

children

. To illustrate

this

, currently,

people

are going to

company

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the company

a company

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in the early morning and reached

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apply

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home

late.

Hence

, they

have

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do have

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not enough

time

to seat with families and discuss with them. So,

due to

this

development

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,development

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they should give their

time

to their closed ones. Another obvious reason is that

people

can do

another

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other

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work

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their

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free

time

For example

, during

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the break

a break

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break

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,break

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they can go

the

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to the

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bank and do some financial

work

. So, I guess, working from

home

development

very

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a very

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useful

development

for employees.

On the other hand

, it is thought that

children

will

also

study

from

home

in the coming future.

Nevertheless

, despite it

has

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having

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some advantages, I believe

children

could face serious drawbacks studying from

home

. One potentially dangerous problem is that they never get practical knowledge of the subjects which are really needed for them.

Moreover

, it is obvious that they cannot establish the school's lab in their

home

Therefore

, students can lack

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apply

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having

some

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apply

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useful knowledge on

this

development

Additionally

, not all

children

can afford digital

technology

and their features

due to

their poverty.

For instance

, poor

people

can not have enough money to buy a computer and access it for

study

Therefore

, it might too tough for them to go to another place and concentrate on

study

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studying

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. In conclusion,

the

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apply

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computer

technology

and

their

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its

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access are going to become cheaper in the future and it is believed that adults and

children

will

be learn

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learn

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from

home

in most of the country.

However

, I think it will be beneficial for working

professional

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professionals

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work

from

home

, but it will be detrimental for

children

study

from

work

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
8
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

381 words

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Around the world it is likely that more adults will work from home, and more children will study from home, as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this will be a positive or negative development?

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