Around the world it is likely that more adults will work from home, and more children will study from home, as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this will be a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, the use of computer
technology
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has been increasing among all ages of
people
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. It is sometimes thought that more
children
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will
study
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from
home
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and more adults will
work
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from
home
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because the digital medium and
technology
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become cheaper and
people
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can easily access them from
home
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. In my opinion,
this
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development
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will be beneficial for adults and will be harmful
for
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children
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.
Firstly
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, I would like to express my opinion
why
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on why
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this
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development
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is helpful for working
professional
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professionals
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. One of the reasons is that
people
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, who will
work
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from
home
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in the future, have enough
time
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to spend
time
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with their families and
children
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. To illustrate
this
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, currently,
people
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are going to
company
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the company
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in the early morning and reached
at
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apply
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home
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late.
Hence
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, they
have
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not enough
time
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to seat with families and discuss with them. So,
due to
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this
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development
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they should give their
time
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to their closed ones. Another obvious reason is that
people
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can do
another
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other
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work
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on
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in
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a
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their
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free
time
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.
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, during
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the break
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break
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they can go
the
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bank and do some financial
work
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. So, I guess, working from
home
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development
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is
very
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useful
development
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for employees.
On the other hand
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, it is thought that
children
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will
also
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study
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from
home
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in the coming future.
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, despite it
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some advantages, I believe
children
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could face serious drawbacks studying from
home
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. One potentially dangerous problem is that they never get practical knowledge of the subjects which are really needed for them.
Moreover
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, it is obvious that they cannot establish the school's lab in their
home
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.
Therefore
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, students can lack
of
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having
some
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apply
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useful knowledge on
this
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development
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.
Additionally
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, not all
children
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can afford digital
technology
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and their features
due to
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their poverty.
For instance
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, poor
people
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can not have enough money to buy a computer and access it for
study
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.
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, it might too tough for them to go to another place and concentrate on
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study
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studying
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. In conclusion,
the
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computer
technology
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and
their
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its
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access are going to become cheaper in the future and it is believed that adults and
children
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will
be learn
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learn
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from
home
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in most of the country.
However
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, I think it will be beneficial for working
professional
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professionals
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to
work
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from
home
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, but it will be detrimental for
children
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to
study
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from
work
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.

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