Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no special knowledge of the following topic. Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

The advancement in medical science has made it possible to treat diseases with developed vaccines, that had remained unaddressed for a long time and took many precious
lives
.
However
, in my point of view,
parents
should be educated and should be held responsible to get their
children
the required vaccines when and if required. Since technology has been transformed dramatically, so is the medical field.
However
, once there was a plethora of childhood diseases that were supposed to be non-treatable. The result was the loss of many precious human
lives
particularly the
children
. A number of diseases can now be dealt
with
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access to vaccines aimed at countering them. Taking the example of polio,
this
has been almost diminished from the world except for least-developed countries and ultimately saved the
lives
of millions, who were at risk of disability that would have run throughout their
lives
. Meanwhile, it’s the parent duty to get their
children
vaccinated as soon as possible or as prescribed by the government authorities, since
parents
are at the receiving end
if
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any physical disability is developed in their
children
.
Nevertheless
, there are
also
many social impacts on
children
due to
disability. The governments can facilitate the
parents
by educating them through regular visits of health workers and letting them know about the importance of vaccination.
In addition
, the government must introduce a policy of some incentives for
parents
to encourage them to vaccinate their
children
. If it is only left
on
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the
parents
to decide themselves it will be colossal damage to the whole of society. With the exception of a few, the majority will not do vaccination citing a number of reasons, jobs,
traveling
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, religious factors, and, many more. In conclusion, multi-layered, sustainable, and collective efforts are required from all walks of life especially
parents
to vaccinate the future generation timely and make them progressive, members of society.
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