The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The first chart depicts the percentage of households with electrical appliances in 99
years
. The second graph illustrates the number of hours of housework per week per household from 1920 to 2019. The percentage of washing
machine
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in 1920 started at 40%, increased to 70% in 1960, slightly decreased in 1980, and increased to 74% in 2019. In 1920, the refrigerator started at 0% and extremely increased to 100% in 1980 and became stable at 100% till 2019. The vacuum cleaner highly increased from 30% in 1920 and became 100% in 2000 and 2019. In 1960 the
percetage
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percentage
of washing
machine
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machines
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and
vacuum
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the vacuum
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cleaner
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was the same at 70%. The number of hours per week of housework
such
as washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning in 1920 started at 50% and year by year extremely decreased to 10% in 99
years
. The first charts show the percentage of electrical appliances like washing machine, refrigerator, and vacuum cleaner increased in 99
years
. The second graph show number of housework decreased every 20
years
.
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