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The computers are widely used in education and some people think that teacher don't play an important role in classroom to what extent do you agree?

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 modern era of the technological world, everything is dependent on computers, these are now a basic part of an individual life. Even in
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 , computers are playing an important role. I agree that with technological advancement the teacher's role in the classroom is decreasing. On the one hand, in the past
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 used to use the blackboard to teach their
students
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 but nowadays digital board has taken their place.
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 the pandemic situation all over the world,
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school classes turned into online classes
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 which tutors cannot get the full attention of their
students
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.
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, online classes can be attended at any place or environment and
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 it is difficult for
teachers
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 to make sure that
students
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 are focusing on topics or not. Some
teachers
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 have extraordinary skills on how to handle
students
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 in different ways. All kids are not the same , some need extra attention to learn things which technology cannot provide .
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 , there are many benefits associated with computers, especially when used for
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. Modern
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 methods are really good in terms of good learning. 3D videos and presentations can help in learning concepts effectively. In conclusion, technology is taking over the traditional
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 system,
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 are losing their importance in the classroom but technology
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 brings new opportunities to
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