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Some people think that it is a waste of time for high school students to study literature, such as novels and poems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people hold the belief that there is no sense to learn
literature
 like novels and poems for
students
of
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 high
school
. I can not agree with
this
 idea. In my point of view, the importance of learning
literature
 should be held in high regard
in
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 every
stages
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stage
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 of education. There are several reasons why I believe that it's important to learn
literature
for
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 high
school
students
.
Firstly
, reading novels and poems can create
some
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 sense of identity and
belonging
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 to a certain nation.
Although
 the storyline in the novels can be fictional, it can give the reader deep insight into the history and culture of a certain nation.
For example
,
students
 can get
better
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 understanding of
19th century
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19th-century
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 Russian society and
war time
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wartime
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 in the historical novel War and
Piece
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Peace
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 by Leo Tolstoy rather than reading regular history textbooks.
Secondly
, studying
literature
 helps
students
 to learn more about language which can improve the way they express themselves and
communication
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their communication
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 skills.
This
 can be especially beneficial for the future career of the
students
 after graduating. Having better communication skills can be their competitive advantage.
Moreover
,
literature
 is considered to be a form of art which brings substance to our lives. Without
art
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 our world would be
ghastly
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a ghastly
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 and boring place to live.
Therefore
 I believe that
literature
 should be
important
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an important
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 part of any high
school
 curriculum as it helps to foster
student's
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students'
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 artistic intelligence and provides a break from
monotony
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the monotony
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 of subjects
such
 as science and math. These days much attention is given to
the
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math and
science based
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 subjects because they are considered to be highly in demand in the economy.
However
, I argue that
literature
 should
also
 be considered as important as
economy
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the economy
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 since it plays
crucial
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 role in the intellectual and psychological development of
young
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the young
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 generation. In conclusion, it is crucial to state that teaching
literature
for
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 high
school
students
 is irreplaceable
due to
aforementioned
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 reasons and I consider that it is a big mistake if we think learning
literature
 is time-
consum
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consuming
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