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The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the amounts of waste produced by three companies over a period of 15 years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The graph illustrates the quantity of
waste
 generated by three companies within 15 years.
overall
,
it is clear that
 during 15 years there is a decrease in producing
waste
 products by
company
 A
while
 there is a
dramatically
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 increase can be seen in
company
C
. At the beginning of the period
company
 A created above 2000
tonnes
waste
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of waste
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 which is much more than the other two companies but in ,2015 they produced less than 9
tonnes
 which
is
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are
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 lower than
company
C
 which produced nearly 9.5
tonnes
 of
waste
. The graph for
company
 B fluctuates, as it is given at the beginning of the period there was a
grown
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growth
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 from 6 to 9.5 tones per year but suddenly it declined sharply as much that
at the end
 of ,2015 it produced just 3
tonnes
 per year
that is
 3 times lower than
group
c
 and 6 tones lower than
group
 A. In the end ,
group
C
 produced more than others
while
Group
 A produced more than
Group
 A.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, company, c, tonnes, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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