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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages for young people who decide to do this?

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Nowadays, some countries inspire youth to work or travel during the
gap
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 year between ending high school and continuing university courses. In that case, it would bring several profits and drawbacks. On the one hand, some
people
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 say that young
people
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 can gain precious life experience through a break before they start a new course in college.
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 with, attending a part-time job have a benefit, which younger
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 the value of money. It helps them to realize the difficulty of earning and saving money, they are
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 able to accumulate knowledge.
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, travelling is an opportunity to expand the horizons for the youth who have a
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 period. If they go outside and meet new
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, they could learn social skills which they cannot be taught by the school.
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, the youth who have been working or travelling are more likely to deal with different circumstances in their life.
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, there are some significant drawbacks that would show up.
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, having a
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 year represents that
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 do not study the educational subject. Without regular study habits, young
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 cannot adjust their education when they back to campus.
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 they have learned experience from the workplace or travel journey, the truth is that they lack professional knowledge of the subject.
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, visiting different countries could let young
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 in dangerous or risky situations. It can easily come out to students who go abroad to explore the world. In my conclusion, I believe that taking a
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 year has both advantages and disadvantages, it still depends on students what they choose they want.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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