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Write about the following topic: Some people think that when recruiting, companies should aim to take on people who are innovative and able to work independently, while others consider that they should recruit people who are able to work in a team and follow instructions. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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According to
 a group of ,
people
 they believe that when hiring staff for companies they should have considered more candidates who are thinking out of the box and working by themself .
on the other hand
 some
people
 think that they should hire
people
 who have the ability to
work
 as a
team
 and following the guidance and instructions,In
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 I will argue that
team
 workers build the success and they are an asset to any organization and
people
 who
work
 alone are having many challenges
due to
 nature of there working styles.
however
 new inventors are assets to any
company
.
Firstly
, Many
people
 believe that if we
work
 as a
team
 we will be stronger and faster when it is completing the given task, and
also
 different ideas and suggestions will help to build strong relations between the workers.For ,example the technology giant Apple has
this
 teamwork concept and their organisational structure is amazing as everyone follows the orders strictly which is coming from
team
 leaders. on the other ,hand
people
 who
work
 alone will create many challenges if one person fails to complete their assessment will affect the whole
company
 because they won't get any help or support from their co-workers.
However
, the
people
 who are inventing new things are invaluable to any organization since
this
 will help to increase
the
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productivity which
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most
of
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the
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organizations are looking after.
for
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 instance, tooth paste
company
 was triple their profit
by
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within a month as one of the
employee
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 invented
instead
 of the aluminium tube he was able to think out of the box and introduce plastic tube which is consumers have a hard time to control usage. in conclusion, in my ,opinion teamwork and following instructions will create a
company
 successful and profitable
also
people
 who are thinking out of the box and invent new things are very valuable to any
company
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