The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Pie charts depict the development of 3 segments of ages over the next 50
years
, commencing from 2000, in two main countries, Yemen and Italy,
Overall
,
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can be clearly seen a gradual rise of adults over the
years
in Yemen country
while
a remarkable downward in the adult rate in Italy, glancing at pies charts reveal that in 2000, the teenager category (00-14
years
) was roughly equal to the adult's portion (15-59
years
) with nearly 46,3 % ,
however
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the estimation in the next 50
years
predicts a dramatic drop in teenager ratio, from exactly 50,1% to 37%,
whereas
adults portion (15-59
years
) will increase with 11% by the year of 2050,
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along with
a slight jump of (60+
years
) category to 5,7%
instead
of 3,6% in 2000,
on the other hand
, Italy registered a high percentage of adults (15-59
years
) in 2000 with 61,6%,
nonetheless
this
rate will decrease to 46,2%
while
the elder's portion (60+
years
) will increase from 24,1% to 42,3% in 2050,
as well as
a fractional reduce in teenagers (0-14
years
) with 3,2% of rate difference.
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