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Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university to work or travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#students #gap #year #school #university #work #travel #outweigh
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In
this
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 contemporary world, people are getting used to the tendency to take a
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year
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 of
students
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 between high
school
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 and university. Even though there are numerous advantages of
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 trend but the fact that
students
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 cannot bare with the drawbacks is needed to be considered.
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 with, it is undeniable that having a
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 off to work and travel can bring numerous advantages for
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.
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, the youngster will have the opportunity to obtain and sharpen their skills
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traveling
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.
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 means that
traveling
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 can help
students
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 acquire social and cultural knowledge. From the perspective of workers in the
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,
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gap
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 time may enable
students
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 to enrich themselves with real-life experiences.
Students
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 may acquire working skills
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 as teamwork, and communication, which are essential for their
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 jobs. On other hand, there are more significant disadvantages to taking a
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year
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. The primary reason is that the young can be overwhelmed by the unwanted difficulties of
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life
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outside
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 of
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school
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the school
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 campus.
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,
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 can affect
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what they are thinking about their
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 life. Another reason is that
students
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 without clear academic achievements may not return to
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 after the
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year
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. What is more, there would be fewer university
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, which directly
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the number of intellectual workforces in the
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. In conclusion,
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 taking a
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 off is advantageous in a few aspects, the shortcomings of
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 trend are more serious to consider. It is recommended that
students
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 should not take a
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 time between high
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 and university
due to
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 some reasons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • real-world experience
  • personal growth
  • maturity
  • practical skills
  • CVs
  • future employment opportunities
  • broadening their horizons
  • cultural awareness
  • career goals
  • academic interests
  • academic momentum
  • rigors of study
  • financial strain
  • income source
  • personal development
  • achievements
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