The map show the changes on the plan of dock between 1980 and today.

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The given maps show the development in the layout plan of the dock from 1980 to

today

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, it is evident from the maps that there have been significant changes in plans. The noticeable one is the central

area

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where the number of ships has dramatically reduced presently.

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,with in 1980 there were two warehouses in the northern part of the plan which were separated by the

crane

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. presently the

warehouse

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in the northwest is replaced with an educational centre,

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the

crane

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and the other

warehouse

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are demolished and replaced with a sailing club and kid's playing

area

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respectively. There were no buildings in the cost previously but

today

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there is a new building there.

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, in 1980 there were lots of ships all over the central section of the plan,

today

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they are no more

however

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there is an introduction of ship museums there. ,

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a flood barrier is included on the east side of the middle

area

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Lastly

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in the southern portion of the map during 1980, there was a

warehouse

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and a

crane

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Today

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crane

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and the

warehouse

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are cleared for the hotel, apartment and parking. ,

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a river walk is introduced at the top

area

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of the south section.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words today, area, crane, warehouse with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

206 words

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