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As countries become more developed, many fast food outlets move into the country giving local people greater access to fast food, advantage and disadvantage:

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As a result
 of opening up to other cultures and countries, various outlets find the opportunity to trade their products to consumers, especially
food
,
in other words
, fast
food
, so
this
 essay will discuss some benefits and demerits of the same, On the one hand, undoubtedly, the fast
food
industry
 has saved time for millions of employees in
this
 rapidly developing world, where every second counts,
for example
instead
 of spending time cooking at home, with only a pre-call , your meal is already ready for you,
moreover
, fast
food
 stores help the locale area to enhance the employability,
such
 as hiring talented cookers, commercial agent, housekeeping and more required profiles which enhance economically the local place,
along with
 the development of various
industry
for instance
, design content, construction
industry
 and its components,
On the other hand
, fast
food
 is an unhealthy lifestyle, the low quality of fast
food
 contains chemicals in order to preserve it as long as possible,
along with
 the hygiene that the majority of store manager does not respect,
consequently
, the consumer most of the time fall sick or even worst happen to endure
food
 poisoning,
furthermore
,
this
industry
 promotes a bad health habit to the generations, and from another perspective,the price allocated to buy the fast
food
 is very expensive compared to the monthly salary, because the homemade meals are more healthy and cheaper than the fast
food
,
such
 as the small retail stores in Europe are known to be way exaggerated in terms of prices,
To conclude
, I believe that fast
food
 could be harmful in the long run to health
as well as
 the budget,
nonetheless
, it enhances widely the local economy and brings income to the residents.
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